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    dots Submission Name: Those Three Wordsdots

    Author: Ayane
    ASL Info:    17/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 71/128/60
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       No matter what everyone else says.....I'll still believe him.....and love him

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    dotsThose Three Wordsdots

    I picture your face
    In the back of my head
    Fabricated from words
    That you've already said
    Those three words that hang
    In each falling tear
    Just three simple words
    I was dying to hear
    I felt for your hand
    But you pulled it away
    So I'll wait for the end
    Let it come as it may
    How much would it hurt
    To have said it more often?
    Now they'll echo here over
    In my dark, lonely coffin
    But as I lay here
    This is all I can do
    Is say those three words
    I hope they reach you
    I hope you hear them
    Let them into your heart
    For I'll always love you
    No matter how far apart

    Submitted on 2006-11-18 18:40:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, this is sweet, and kinda sad, it makes me depressed .... people all want to hear those words, i am one of them i will admit, this rhymes and is very clear, i think you did a good job writing this... can't wait to read more of your work ...

    | Posted on 2007-02-14 00:00:00 | by IsabellaAurora | [ Reply to This ]
      Just three simple words
    I was dying to hear

    Those Three Words...I love you? Hm. How often does anyone wish to hear them from that special someone?
    Nice rhythm to this one, quite pleasant to read aloud thanks to the rhyme.

    P.S. If you'd like a different three words do go read my Three little words.
    | Posted on 2006-11-18 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]

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