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    dots Submission Name: Walk Away Happydots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 457
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    Bytes: 713



    Description:
       A poem about love


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    dotsWalk Away Happydots
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    Let's quit while we are ahead
    Before one of us is hurt
    So we can look back
    And now feel lower than dirt
    This love we have
    Will stay this way
    No regret or pain
    What do you say?
    We can look back
    And actually smile
    No harsh feelings
    The love lasts, if only for awhile
    I don't want to hurt you
    Can't you see?
    This will be so much better
    For both you & me
    So let's kiss our last kiss
    And walk away unscarred
    Exactly the same
    Just how we are
    Goodbye my love
    This is for your own good
    Remember us just this way
    And smile like we should




    Submitted on 2006-11-18 18:43:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You have been hurt, and hurt deeply. The pain that arises from the betrayal of someone in whom we deeply trusted goes far beyond the surface. And so do the defense mechanisms we design to keep ourselves from getting hurt, or from attaining happiness, only to lose it. Just know that love is sometimes worth the risk. I could relate to this poem in a huge way, and I look forward to reading more of your stuff.
    | Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by Soul-Hugger | [ Reply to This ]


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