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    dots Submission Name: Deepdots

    Author: SOS33
    ASL Info:    20/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 39/51/41
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    The rain hits my face,
    blending in with my tears
    hiding my bloodshot eyes,
    from the eyes, surrounding,
    As I run down the street
    running to escape
    the real world.
    The rain soaking my clothes through
    weighing my already weak body
    as if I am sinking into
    the deep pitch blackness of
    the ocean's bottom.
    Until I fall from exhaustion
    my clothes sticking to ME
    weighing me down
    my problems,
    surrounding ME,
    suffocating ME,
    drowning ME,
    pulling ME down,
    and deeper,
    into the blackness
    that slowly surrounds me

    Submitted on 2006-11-19 10:57:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      level with you. but i get a weird, insane comfort from the rain. i stood in my backyard in the rain at 11 at night last summer (until my mom yelled at me) and i was eased. im just a loser, i know. but i know what you're talking about. falling, running. one question...do you want help? are you afraid to ask for it? am i reading way too much into this? anyway, good write.

    i tip my hat and bid thee farewell.
    | Posted on 2006-11-20 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]

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