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    dots Submission Name: time for something elsedots
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    Author: gjenkins
    Elite Ratio:    1.85 - 88/107/97
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 663
    Average Vote:    2.0000
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    dotstime for something elsedots
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    I could write about
    anything, anywhere, anytime
    of the day, just sit
    and fixate on my starvation, or
    being cramped into a minivan
    with other nowhere individuals,
    I sat on campus stairs smoking
    whatever the all black dressed
    communist had to spare.
    I myself a narcissists could care
    less about their cause, my cause
    was self survival. I found a small place
    where rats ran up and down the hallway.
    I wrote mostly at night, drinking on
    borrowed money from my rich
    communist friends. I sat thru a lot of college
    classes and ate on campus when
    I could scam someone out of
    a lunch ticket. One female student
    in particular had a crush on me, for
    some reason and would buy me lunch,
    I sat near the cafeteria window
    staring at the falling snow while she went on
    about getting a degree in linguistics and
    becoming a translator, she was from
    Des Moines IA.,
    I love you, she said. I take her hand,
    I hustle in another cup of coffee, I love you too.
    she invites me to a jazz concert and
    it makes me wonder if I should invite her
    back to my place for more than just
    coffee.







    Submitted on 2006-11-19 10:59:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Great! dude!
    | Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by Squall Leon Hea | [ Reply to This ]
      Cool! man
    | Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by Squall Leon Hea | [ Reply to This ]
      sick.... yet intruging. i like it tho im not sure why
    | Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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