Darkness

Author: SOS33 ASL Info:    20/f/usa Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 39 /51 /41 Words: 100

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Darkness

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No Darkness surrounds me, not a red tear is shed since I have decided that I'd rather not be dead Although i still can't look in the mirror and smile I'm sure that will change, in just a little while. The good thing is, that I'm not sad all the time, and my secret plastic friend, has been broken into nine. The greens are greener, the whites whiter, even the sun is a little bit brighter. So what can I say, to this change in spirit & mind? Only that I'm slowly leaving the sad darkness, behind.

Submitted on 2006-11-19 11:03:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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what can i say about it? i guess you want to do something good but it doesnt have rhythm and thnose thing that makes a poem better. you use simple words without a meaning. i mean you dont have many symbolism and those things, i hope you getme .. so wel thanks for sharing anyway . and if you have time please take a look to my writings have a nice day and peace and love Victor

| Posted on 2006-11-20 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]

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