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    dots Submission Name: Liesdots
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    Author: SOS33
    ASL Info:    20/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 39/51/41
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsLiesdots
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    I lie to you,
    to protect you.
    I lie to me,
    to protect you.
    I lie to you,
    to please you.
    I lie to me,
    to hurt me.
    To cause me pain,
    because pain = pleasure.
    pain: keeps me sane,
    keeps me from ending everything,
    helps me get through each minute of the day,
    when I am down,
    pain, for me, is the best remedy.




    Submitted on 2006-11-19 11:09:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a great piece of writing. It expresses your thoughts and feelings very well. Although I may not relate with it, it is easy to understand. I do know a lot of people who could relate to it though. The best kind of writing is that which expresses ones personal and emotional side. This is excellent.

    Keep up the great writing.

    peace.
    -Kamerin
    | Posted on 2007-01-13 00:00:00 | by Kamerin Brown | [ Reply to This ]
      (I so agree with your icon/picture tyhing)

    Anyway, about your poem. It could use some work, but I thought it was pretty good. It's very bitter-sweet without the sweet...but not so purely bitter...it's hard to explain. It's like these two people can't live without out each other, because they both give eachother what they want and need, yet hurt eachother at the same time. That's what I liked the most about this, the dilema.

    *tox*
    | Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      (I so agree with your icon/picture tyhing)

    Anyway, about your poem. It could use some work, but I thought it was pretty good. It's very bitter-sweet without the sweet...but not so purely bitter...it's hard to explain. It's like these two people can't live without out each other, because they both give eachother what they want and need, yet hurt eachother at the same time. That's what I liked the most about this, the dilema.

    *tox*
    | Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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