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Cayenne


Author: _taateli_
ASL Info:    18/F/Finland
Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 84 /113 /29
Words: 45
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
Total Views: 1095
Average Vote:    5.0000
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Description:


Momentarily.


Cayenne




You are the van Gogh of our time

painting

insane!

Be high on hunger

and cayenne –

Have a clear liquid

to drown yourself into,

since Needles are not needed

Now.




Submitted on 2006-11-19 11:30:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I do like this piece very much, in one form it comes across a simple poem but underneath it has depth and understanding that releases itself the more you read. The refernce to Van Gogh is the key since he was a man never understood in his own time and considered a fool or at best a keen amatuer and yet now he is seen for who he really is a genius of great power and life.The writer tells us a story of a person who needs a drug for insperation when she is telling them that they do not and the talent is there without the needle or drink.
Its a poem that i will enjoy reading time and time again and i am sure more of it secrets will come out for me.
| Posted on 2006-12-05 00:00:00 | by Colin Douglas | [ Reply to This ]
  Ooooh. I like this a lot. "Be high on hunger" I always find this an interesting concept among artists... one of my favorite musicians is said to have lived off ice cream for a period... and others have been rumored to have had an obsession with weighing less than 140 pounds. I myself have often flirted with the idea, creating art while under the clasp of an extreme hunger. You are short and precise and I love it.
A favorite.
Peace, LucyDiamond
| Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]
  creepy much, Em?
seriously spooky.
i get the image of a starving artist, with 'of our time' not referring to the present day, but referring to a time between van Gogh's time and ours...

perhaps when mainline drugs were not yet discovered... the 'clear liquid' being alcohol...
serving as inspiration and a replacement for food...

perhaps he needs alcohol to be inspired enough to paint- and he figures that if he can make a good enough painting, he can sell it and make enough money to buy food instead of alcohol...

that is, until he runs out of the profit he makes and needs to paint another one...

wow-
i got a lot of stuff from those few words...
you know what that means?
that means it's fantastic...
if your piece makes someone ramble on for ever and ever-
you got a good piece there, lady!!!
:)
~Syn
| Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by Syn | [ Reply to This ]


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