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    dots Submission Name: Dreams Don't Diedots
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    Author: Soul-Hugger
    ASL Info:    33/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 409/221/65
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 968
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 770



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       For my future lover


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    dotsDreams Don't Diedots
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    A new day dawns,
    bright future glows,
    I see it in your eyes,
    as the gentle river flows.

    I see your shining face,
    in the landscape of a dream,
    and nothing can replace
    the love we're meant to feel.

    But I don't know who you are,
    or even when we'll meet,
    I just feel it in my heart,
    that our friendship will be sweet.

    I long to touch your soft, warm lips,
    and run my fingers through your hair,
    but most of all I long to know
    you always will be there.

    So in these times of trouble,
    as you push away a sigh,
    just draw another life-filled breath,
    and know that dreams don't die.




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      I see your shining face,
    in the landscape of a dream,
    and nothing can replace
    the love we're meant to feel

    The 1st stanza before this one speaks to me.As someone special leaving or a "Small departure of moving on with life." And then the 2nd one just zooms it all in on complete feelings.That's how I felt based on the impression.It reminds me of how I want to be so close to this particular person but really we are just strangers wanting to find our way. Nice piece my friend.
    | Posted on 2010-07-17 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      
    I long to touch your soft, warm lips,
    and run my fingers through your hair,
    but most of all I long to know
    you always will be there.

    So in these times of trouble,
    as you push away a sigh,
    just draw another life-filled breath,
    and know that dreams don't die.




    ah yes, the hope of the ever elusive affection - love.
    is no this the very thing that we all yearn. quite possibly the only overarching quality that places each of us at another mercy. for to love is to be vulnerable, and to be vulnerable is to be susceptible to pain.

    now, i really enjoyed this write. it conveyed my feelings towards love these days quite nicely. that is to say, my search for love. it just seems that no one has genuinely moved me yet.

    for i long for intimacy. the intimacy where two souls pass through one another and become pure amalgamation. (i wrote about this in my last write "kindle the earth").

    the write is quite fancy with its rhythm and surely a worthy muse. you did a nice job on this piece, really.

    ciao
    -john-paul
    | Posted on 2010-07-05 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]
      I have now read more than a few of your works and most of them have been sad . I want you to know I could positively kill your ex. for destroying your journals . All that aside this work is positively up beat . I like the positive outlook and the way you use analogy and metaphor to sweeten the pot of its expression . I really enjoyed the dreamscapes it caused me . I am currently without a companion and could truly appreciate your expressions of longing . I especially liked the last verse . An excellent way to end this treatise . Like an open ended invitation to share in its futurity . Well done , I'll read more later .

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2010-06-30 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      There it is again. Feeling. You're on a different level here. You took a scenario, built it in your mind, then submerged in it, and wrote down the place in your life that you felt it would be. Absolutely wonderful.

    Cheers.
    | Posted on 2009-09-07 00:00:00 | by Orin | [ Reply to This ]
      "The trouble with this website is 'It's more about the comments than the poetry' so if I want to tell you what I think, they expect a word count exceeding the average of around 42. Some people get around this by repeating lines from your poem (to up the count) but I will never stoop that low (although I'm tempted). Where was I, oh yeah, I simply wanted to say what a great job you did and that I enjoyed your poem, and also will endeavor to read the rest of your work.---keep writing."---Mugsy--
    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by mugsy | [ Reply to This ]
      That was a rather touching piece to write about someone you haven't even met yet, but still it was honest and straight from the heart and as the reader I had no choice but to believe those words to be truth. I loved the way this poem created an absence of possibility and left to once again trust in things most people have long lost trust in like hope, faith and destiny....keep up the great work

    great write
    llcollins
    | Posted on 2006-11-20 00:00:00 | by L.L.COLLINS | [ Reply to This ]


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