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    dots Submission Name: The Pleasing Routedots

    Author: Soul-Hugger
    ASL Info:    33/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 409/222/66
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
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       About that annoying approval-seeking behaviour that's hard to change once you're in the habit of it.

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    dotsThe Pleasing Routedots

    One would only think it strange,
    to see his life had rearranged
    to fit in someone else's needs,
    but who would ever know things changed?

    So heart-to-heart, with frozen doubt,
    we continue on the pleasing route,
    and forget about our own true path,
    the purpose life is all about.

    Then while our thoughts lay broken, scattered,
    in some misplaced and empty clatter,
    we gather our dreams and hold on tight,
    before our whole self-conscience shatters.

    For I am me, and you are you,
    and things are best when acted true.
    Besides, I like you as yourself,
    always discovering something new.

    Submitted on 2006-11-19 13:32:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I've been sinking into my fave-at-the-moment movie, and this appeared at the top of your list... it must be a sign.

    I hate the "I love you enough to change everything about you" relationships... or should I say, I love those. or should I say, I enjoy the drama. or should I say, actually, it's not the drama, it's watching the person who's trying to break you, break himself trying.

    Yeah, maybe that's what should be said...

    Rarely do you find a genuine, "I'll never change a thing about you, except maybe your bra color..." kinda guy.
    | Posted on 2010-05-23 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      Nicely done. I can relate to the pleasing route -vs- the true path. Relationships have a funny way of setting that truth up. Most people would forgo struggling for what is good for them when they can settle for a comfortable bliss. The selfishness in not wanting to adjust to someone elses needs is all too familiar as well. It is obvious that this couple is not on the same path, well, at least, they shouldn't be.
    The rhyming scheme is smooth and the rythem is consistant. Good poem.


    | Posted on 2006-11-20 00:00:00 | by etherealpoet | [ Reply to This ]

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