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    dots Submission Name: Numbdots

    Author: Soul-Hugger
    ASL Info:    33/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 409/221/65
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 662
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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       Written fall of 1993, I was 15, and going through that time of identity crisis and confusing emotion. I was never quite sure if this poem really made a lot of sense or if some of the words just sounded good together. Thoughts?

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    i sit awake,
    staring away
    into nothing.
    drowning light closes in.
    soft petals
    floating downwards
    cover my eyes.

    i turn away.

    i lie asleep,
    dreaming nearer,
    drawn from something.
    swimming darkness opens up.
    hard rocks
    thrown upwards
    come crashing down.

    i turn away.


    i turn away, emotionless.

    Submitted on 2006-11-19 13:52:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ditto here what the two earlier comments said except that I'd actually like to feel emotionless sometimes, I need the rest!
    | Posted on 2010-07-21 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is really emotive and sensitively drawn. You vividly capture the abyss within people’s being. The imagery is incredibly, smooth, “soft petals” and yet violent “hard rocks” but both come down upon the persona, indicating a world that is collapsing.
    | Posted on 2010-05-26 00:00:00 | by Speacenik | [ Reply to This ]
      you were going through this at 15? i'm nearly 30 and still get these feelings!
    trying to work things out in our minds, i'm pretty much always like this.
    nice, neat little write, i feel i can relate to this.
    | Posted on 2006-11-21 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]

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