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    dots Submission Name: *Chocolate Kissesdots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 945
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 397



    Description:
       this is a poem i wrote for my bf just to show him how much i love him. im not sure if i like the title though so if u have any suggestions greatly appreiciated.


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    dots*Chocolate Kissesdots
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    Chocolate;
    Sweet aroma,
    Sugary taste,
    Givivg the immpression of
    being in love.

    You;
    Sexy aftershave,
    Sultry kisses,
    Silky soft skin,
    The feeling of actually
    being in love.


    A comparison,
    Of chocolate to you,
    is no comparison at all,
    you prevail incontrovertibly.




    Submitted on 2006-11-19 13:57:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      All I can say is I hope you still feel this way because it's a great place to be in.

    I'd like to echo the sentiments of those before me in saying it's a good write and nice to see something light hearted for sure...

    Too much misplaced doom-and-gloom laying about you see ;)
    | Posted on 2007-03-03 00:00:00 | by Senna27NZ | [ Reply to This ]
      This one I really like
    I mean really like
    I am a big Chocolate lover
    And since chocolate is an aphrodisiac the two fit together perfectly
    I like how you summed up this write in a short amount of words so the write dont run on
    You worded this perfectly
    Another Excellent Job by you
    Loved It!!!!
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Mmmmmmm chocolate, never met a guy that compared to it. Cute poem. Keep on writing.
    ~chelle
    | Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by Priestess | [ Reply to This ]
      sounds like candy is love right or I never got the piocture of it, ty good write should keep writting more
    | Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha, I get it. I mean everyone like chocolate and think that it's the best...! I find that your comparison is very true....

    This was original in it's descriptive sense, however ' given the impression of' seemed to ring...off with me. Of course I'm just one of those people that like point out the wrong things...but I really found this to say great.

    how about " Chocolate and you" or " chocolate kisses"
    | Posted on 2006-11-27 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]
      not too bad but It think you can do better
    | Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by Squall Leon Hea | [ Reply to This ]
      Title?
    How about:
    "NO COMPARISON"?

    or

    "You Prevail"?

    or

    "There is Nothing Like You"?
    | Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by Soul-Hugger | [ Reply to This ]
      Refreshing, light, reads well.
    Nice to see something light-hearted for a change. Chocolate is wonderful but it is a small replacement for the real thing.
    | Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by Soul-Hugger | [ Reply to This ]


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