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    dots Submission Name: I thought I Had It Madedots

    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Some thoughts I had in mind.

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    dotsI thought I Had It Madedots

    I stay surrounded by the same faces,
    The same people from yesterday
    Only thing's that changed
    Is the fact that these obstacles and phases,
    Seem to aggravate me every day.

    I see the reflection of myself,
    wondering what the fuck went wrong,
    Why I put my trust in someone else,
    Just to help me carry on.
    Maybe I'm just confused or tired,
    The life-style I chose,
    Has my bloodpressure elevating higher.

    How long till I die?
    Is my only question,
    Moving with hopes to find someone I admire,
    I tell myself to eliminate
    Any given suggestions...

    ...And to think I had it made...

    Submitted on 2006-11-19 14:59:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i mean surrounded im really trippin
    | Posted on 2006-11-20 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      correct spelling "surroundings" lol
    | Posted on 2006-11-20 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]

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