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    dots Submission Name: Love's Sonnetdots
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    Author: Scribner
    Elite Ratio:    2.3 - 131/134/18
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    dotsLove's Sonnetdots
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    Farewell! My arms could not contain your love,
    nor my strangled verse touch your impetuous heart.
    My faith, you said, I must in constancy prove
    Before you would your secrets impart.
    Was I not true to our moonlit oath?
    Or am I guilty of some perfidious act?
    Was it something I did, or said, or both
    That made you forget our lover's pact?
    I cannot say from whence you came,
    Or to was distant climes you flee.
    All I know is that my heart you claimed
    And I would suffer it all again with glee.
    Love, you are the most fleeting of dreams,
    Made of shining stars and soft moonbeams.




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      Let face it! - YOU made it for me! I think I am in lust? - Forgive me but its the kind of words I'd like to find - after a missunderstanding - and be WOOED BACK TO THESE ARMS!!!
    | Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by ms.v | [ Reply to This ]
      Really great I think. I concur with some of the others, the last two lines make me swoon...pass the smelling salts...Terrific
    | Posted on 2004-01-29 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good. I mean Really good. It is difficult to write an excellent poem that rhymes and you certainly have pulled it off. Question, though. Did you mean to say, "Or to was distant climes you flee" or should that be "what".
    | Posted on 2004-01-29 00:00:00 | by kblyric | [ Reply to This ]


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