Sign up to EliteSkills




Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password

Therapy At Its Best


Author: precious_poetry
ASL Info:    19 F TN
Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137 /145 /67
Words: 203
Class/Type: Poetry /Cutting or Mutilation
Total Views: 908
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
Bytes: 1316



Description:


This isn't usually what write about, but I think I have done ok with the subject. Let me know what you think...


Therapy At Its Best



A blade gleaming brightly,
Tempting me once again.
Just one drop of blood,
Let the pain pour from within.
One quick slice upon the arm,
To release anger and pain.
One drip after two drops,
The sadness slowly drains.

The blade flashes a grin,
As I twirl it in my hand.
Contemplating the thought,
I cry where I stand.
One perfect line,
To erase all of this
Replace my burning tears,
With one slice of the wrist.

I do not wish for death,
Just to feel is all I need.
To let go of all the hatred,
As I watch myself bleed.
Whats one more jagged scar,
Along my silken skin,
If it means I can release,
All the pain held within?

No one will know,
I can hide it so well.
Scars are much deeper,
Than any scorching pit of hell.
But they can be hidden,
Kept secret from all others.
I will slice just this once,
And keep the scars covered.

This one perfect line,
Cut so very deep.
The gleaming blade soiled,
But I no longer weep.
Tears dry up quickly,
And I lay down to rest.
Watching blood pour from me,
Therapy at its best.




Submitted on 2006-11-19 21:25:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!




Comments


  i think that this poem doesnt have an original subject. but as far as writing is concerned it is pretty and laid out well. why did you choose to write this? It seems to be a short explaination of why the subject is cutting himself/herself. i dont really understand how i'm supposed to judge other peoples poems ne way. i just write what i think. i guess i'll just read the rest of your poems. maybe i can get an idea of how you write from there.
| Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by disillusion | [ Reply to This ]


Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?



125802