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    dots Submission Name: Therapy At Its Bestdots

    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
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       This isn't usually what write about, but I think I have done ok with the subject. Let me know what you think...

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    dotsTherapy At Its Bestdots

    A blade gleaming brightly,
    Tempting me once again.
    Just one drop of blood,
    Let the pain pour from within.
    One quick slice upon the arm,
    To release anger and pain.
    One drip after two drops,
    The sadness slowly drains.

    The blade flashes a grin,
    As I twirl it in my hand.
    Contemplating the thought,
    I cry where I stand.
    One perfect line,
    To erase all of this
    Replace my burning tears,
    With one slice of the wrist.

    I do not wish for death,
    Just to feel is all I need.
    To let go of all the hatred,
    As I watch myself bleed.
    Whats one more jagged scar,
    Along my silken skin,
    If it means I can release,
    All the pain held within?

    No one will know,
    I can hide it so well.
    Scars are much deeper,
    Than any scorching pit of hell.
    But they can be hidden,
    Kept secret from all others.
    I will slice just this once,
    And keep the scars covered.

    This one perfect line,
    Cut so very deep.
    The gleaming blade soiled,
    But I no longer weep.
    Tears dry up quickly,
    And I lay down to rest.
    Watching blood pour from me,
    Therapy at its best.

    Submitted on 2006-11-19 21:25:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i think that this poem doesnt have an original subject. but as far as writing is concerned it is pretty and laid out well. why did you choose to write this? It seems to be a short explaination of why the subject is cutting himself/herself. i dont really understand how i'm supposed to judge other peoples poems ne way. i just write what i think. i guess i'll just read the rest of your poems. maybe i can get an idea of how you write from there.
    | Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by disillusion | [ Reply to This ]

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