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    dots Submission Name: My Addictive Drugdots

    Author: Katana Ryoko
    ASL Info:    17/F/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 483/428/109
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 689
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsMy Addictive Drugdots

    Get out of my fucking head
    Making it hard to focus
    When I have to concentrate
    Every time I try to think
    I only get thoughts of you
    And I don't feel it's normal
    Really believe I need help
    But instead I keep running
    Back to the person that is
    Causing mental disruption
    I've fallen in love with him
    Never to get rid of him
    He is my addictive drug
    Do you see my confusion
    I state these contradictions
    That I cannot make sense of
    My heart is in this turmoil
    And I am enjoying it
    If it means there is an us

    Submitted on 2006-11-20 01:58:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very nice. you do a good job of describing what it actually feels like to NOT want to like/love someone anymore, or again. like your other poem, each line forces me into the next.
    | Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by lauren hamill | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like the raw emotion that you put into it.. makes me think of what I'm going through right now... good write
    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by angeldust | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the raw emotion and passion that this poem brings to mind. You can truly make the reader FEEL your messgae. Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by Lady Brighid | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a damnably good piece of poetry...the meter is nearly flawless, you have 7 syllables in almost every line--the last 6 or 7 lines it begins to change--and THIS gives the poem a wonderful coherence and excellent pace...it lets the reader fly through the poem...(if you change the poem and give all of the lines 7 syllables you will have a rather exceptional peice of verse...bravo...bravo...bravo...
    | Posted on 2006-11-21 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]

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