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    dots Submission Name: gonedots
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    Author: crazy_83
    ASL Info:    28/f/mo
    Elite Ratio:    1.99 - 27/29/18
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 748
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 518



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    dotsgonedots
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    lost and alone
    ive been here before
    but its never the same

    wish i could see you
    your gone in my eyes
    but i still feel the pain

    i lied to much
    and left you to die
    my soul is cold

    i was unfaithful
    i broke your heart
    my reasons untold

    you will never come back
    no more chances to be
    your eyes are dry

    i will wait
    heart in my hand
    asking myself why...




    Submitted on 2006-11-20 02:41:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is very nicly writen. I like how you said "wish i could see you your gone in my eyes
    but i still feel the pain" I know how you feel on that part...I like the way you write so keep it up. I hope I get a chance to read more of your stuff
    | Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by Lover girl | [ Reply to This ]
      an ancient lover's lament retold nicely here! Bravo!
    | Posted on 2006-11-20 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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