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    dots Submission Name: Disasterdots
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    Author: EsCaPisT
    ASL Info:    17,Female,Singapore
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 42/38/38
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsDisasterdots
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    Forget about the debris of the storm
    That brought upon torrential tears.
    Its pinpricks had plucked my meagre soul
    It left me as a noneity, as my heart suffers from the wear and tear.
    All i have left is a concussed mind
    And a heart, now fragile and brittle
    Hurt worse than your broken one.
    My pride, it sways when your hurricane hits me.
    It practically killed me with the strong winds
    But it was all a zephyr, silently telling me to repent.
    Because deep down i should know,
    The worse is yet to come.




    Submitted on 2006-11-20 06:20:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the pinpricks part seriously. and it sounds like a cross between a natural disaster and a disaster of emotions o_O
    | Posted on 2007-08-14 00:00:00 | by sango_amaya | [ Reply to This ]
      I think the last line is "the worst is yet to come" rather than what's written there.
    Quite visual, rather short, I'm not totally reminded of a catclysmic disaster such as a random hurricane, but rather a slow one, more like an avalanche that's going at a snail's pace then going to blow soon.
    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      This is beautiful~shows deep emotion~good work
    | Posted on 2006-11-20 00:00:00 | by DesecratedDream | [ Reply to This ]


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