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    dots Submission Name: Yhriter's Bloquedots

    Author: Pietro
    ASL Info:    30/m/cebu
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 300/176/37
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
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       i havent written a poem in a long time now... anway, this piece was inspired by a fellow user's work, this user gives you great critiques that either want you to try harder, or not try at all. He's the one that got me on this site in the first place anyway, so blame him. lately i heard he's in to guys. meh.

    here's the link to his piece you can see the original of this piece there. http://www.eliteskills.com/z/124344

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    dotsYhriter's Bloquedots


    clickety clickety




    [Ctrl Shift <-

    Backspace Backspace Backspace]

    ...supposed to write something cool.

    Donít be silly; you always try to make yourself sound smart in these things.

    I know. Right now, itís really hard.

    So? Construct fanciful wordings that exhibit your vast gumption and highlight your perspicacity.


    No, itís too difficult! I'm in way over my head with this pseudo-esoteric piece!

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    Submitted on 2006-11-20 13:29:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i'm glad i came upon a comment of yours so i could happen upon a poem of yours also...

    i have felt this numerous times....and this reminds me so much, coincidentally, of a movie i watched last night with Jeff Bridges.."a dog year"

    he was a writer in it...contracted to do a novel..and all he could do was stare at the little line on the computer screen where letters were supposed to start showing up..

    i like this poem because you really create the sound of writer's block...the useless tapping of the keys...when nothing coming out is making sense or going anywhere...sometimes i just start hitting the same letter all the way across the screen...

    clickety clack..i want my creativity back..

    love the last line.

    | Posted on 2011-05-31 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      :) how many times I have been through that :)

    I really like how you expressed the whole writers block....Love how you started it...I had no idea what you were implying with the "click" until I read the ctrl-shift-backspace :)

    One of the more original pieces I have read in a while.

    "Donít be silly; you always try to make yourself sound smart in these things."

    I love that line :)

    good stuff.

    | Posted on 2007-01-18 00:00:00 | by pist0l_pete | [ Reply to This ]
      I can venture a guess as I've read this before and that same person that drives you to literary buffness is probably the same person that I have let down time and again with my lack of forward momentum with my own writing. One day, I keep telling myself, one day I will do you guys proud. In the meantime I waft around a desolate creative landscape.... so yeah... rather than pommel myself... I better go 'meh'.

    Good to see you posting again.
    | Posted on 2006-11-22 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]
      Tali, he's just saying I'm into guys because he wants me. It's ok, I can deal with that lol.

    As for you Pietro... um, think nonsensical...

    Doobity doo wah wah katchunk blingity poo... doowop a ding dang doo. And hyennnnnnaaaaaaa's on the savanahhhhhh make me wannna do the lambada on a Landrover as I shoot furiously scribbling Filipinos in the Congo with my rifle.

    Doowop, this should be a number one hit.


    | Posted on 2006-11-20 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      what's him being into guys got 2 do with anything? I like the start though, with the sound of the keys, it's quite different reading so many lines of onomatapoeia (sp?)
    | Posted on 2006-11-20 00:00:00 | by Tali | [ Reply to This ]

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