Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Yhriter's Bloquedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Pietro
    ASL Info:    30/m/cebu
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 298/175/36
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
    Total Views: 944
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 841



    Description:
       i havent written a poem in a long time now... anway, this piece was inspired by a fellow user's work, this user gives you great critiques that either want you to try harder, or not try at all. He's the one that got me on this site in the first place anyway, so blame him. lately i heard he's in to guys. meh.

    here's the link to his piece you can see the original of this piece there. http://www.eliteskills.com/z/124344


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsYhriter's Bloquedots
    -------------------------------------------


    CLICKETY CLACK CLACK

    clickety clickety

    CLACKÖ

    Clack

    Clack...

    [Ctrl Shift <-

    Backspace Backspace Backspace]

    ...supposed to write something cool.

    Donít be silly; you always try to make yourself sound smart in these things.

    I know. Right now, itís really hard.

    So? Construct fanciful wordings that exhibit your vast gumption and highlight your perspicacity.

    ....

    No, itís too difficult! I'm in way over my head with this pseudo-esoteric piece!









    [Alt F4]




    Submitted on 2006-11-20 13:29:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      i'm glad i came upon a comment of yours so i could happen upon a poem of yours also...

    i have felt this numerous times....and this reminds me so much, coincidentally, of a movie i watched last night with Jeff Bridges.."a dog year"

    he was a writer in it...contracted to do a novel..and all he could do was stare at the little line on the computer screen where letters were supposed to start showing up..

    i like this poem because you really create the sound of writer's block...the useless tapping of the keys...when nothing coming out is making sense or going anywhere...sometimes i just start hitting the same letter all the way across the screen...

    clickety clack..i want my creativity back..

    love the last line.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-05-31 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      :) how many times I have been through that :)

    I really like how you expressed the whole writers block....Love how you started it...I had no idea what you were implying with the "click" until I read the ctrl-shift-backspace :)

    One of the more original pieces I have read in a while.

    "Donít be silly; you always try to make yourself sound smart in these things."

    I love that line :)

    good stuff.

    cheers,
    -pete
    | Posted on 2007-01-18 00:00:00 | by pist0l_pete | [ Reply to This ]
      I can venture a guess as I've read this before and that same person that drives you to literary buffness is probably the same person that I have let down time and again with my lack of forward momentum with my own writing. One day, I keep telling myself, one day I will do you guys proud. In the meantime I waft around a desolate creative landscape.... so yeah... rather than pommel myself... I better go 'meh'.

    Good to see you posting again.
    | Posted on 2006-11-22 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]
      Tali, he's just saying I'm into guys because he wants me. It's ok, I can deal with that lol.

    As for you Pietro... um, think nonsensical...

    Doobity doo wah wah katchunk blingity poo... doowop a ding dang doo. And hyennnnnnaaaaaaa's on the savanahhhhhh make me wannna do the lambada on a Landrover as I shoot furiously scribbling Filipinos in the Congo with my rifle.

    Doowop, this should be a number one hit.

    Doowop.

    | Posted on 2006-11-20 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      what's him being into guys got 2 do with anything? I like the start though, with the sound of the keys, it's quite different reading so many lines of onomatapoeia (sp?)
    | Posted on 2006-11-20 00:00:00 | by Tali | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    125861

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    The Want written by Daniel Barlow
    Live In Between written by teika5
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Compartments written by TheStillSilence
    A bit of Pain written by teika5
    Day 6 written by TheStillSilence
    A Thousand Reflections written by endlessgame23
    Day 5 written by TheStillSilence
    Rooted in Nature written by Chelebel
    Adoration written by TheStillSilence
    None the Wiser written by endlessgame23
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    The Human Harmonic written by Daniel Barlow
    Lie back & tan written by Daniel Barlow
    Not the Devil, but the Wind written by endlessgame23
    Night- time written by Daniel Barlow
    Relentless. The Visceral Fracture. written by Daniel Barlow
    Mystery Read written by kyserin
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    Deep written by Janesaddiction
    Loop-di-Loop written by endlessgame23
    a leaf of shadow and edge written by Daniel Barlow
    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    Starseed written by endlessgame23
    Twin Intercept written by Daniel Barlow
    The Curtain Call written by faideddarkness
    In a Corner written by jeniecel
    Gaia written by endlessgame23

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry