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    dots Submission Name: Death and Womandots
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    Author: runaway_poet
    ASL Info:    21/m/limbo
    Elite Ratio:    6.2 - 42/41/21
    Words: 303
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 826
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1783



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       this is the first version of a song inspired my a drwing by an amazing artist from the nazi germany era Kathe Kollwitz i hope its not to horribale


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    dotsDeath and Womandots
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    Death and woman

    The night burns like only the piercing cold could

    The shiver

    The fear

    The pain inside

    You whisper

    Your scream
    (but only in you mind)

    The simple utterance of something we deny
    The truth bellow’s in our mind no need to discuss

    He is coming tonight with the glistening black wings of the night

    (Tonight I’m going to lose you)

    I will hold you in a moment of bliss
    I will connect with you in a kiss

    But you have grown so much and I have not, a woman an angel given to a child
    How can a child protect an angel from his one word his one true name

    He comes to grant you your wings to set you free from this hell
    To take you away from me…

    The struggle (in vain) the moment of time where I see his face and like a child I am I cannot accept I cannot let you go

    Your voice

    Your love

    My innocence
    My hands

    They bleed but I cannot let go

    I will hold you in a moment of bliss
    I will connect with you in a kiss

    But you have grown so much and I have not, a woman an angel given to a child
    How can a child protect an angel from his one word his one true name

    Its time for you to go…

    The question stabs me like a million knives

    (why)


    The silence deafens me that darkness consumes and in a breath

    You’re gone

    And I’m left fetal and shaking bleeding and sore…(alone)

    One solitary thought remains

    goodbye




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      your inner self is breaking out. the feelings you put in this poetry is a work of art. check out my page
    | Posted on 2008-07-19 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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