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    dots Submission Name: Vendettadots
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    Author: Twisted
    Elite Ratio:    7.47 - 159/57/75
    Words: 287
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 749
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       First off I'd like to thank all of those who entered. There were many good entries to choose from this time around. Though I would have liked to have seen more entries, the ones entered were beyond adequette. It wasn't easy to choose, but I liked this one the most. Not to dismiss the quality of the others, but this one felt as if it had more depth, emotion, originality, colour, and discriptiveness. It captivated me and pulled me in, not easily done these days. Once again I thank you all for entering and hope you will do so again next time around!




    I was pleased at dismentled's comment about this poem I submitted to his contest, because I really didn't think that the poem was really all that good. But he had made my day when he posted the fact that I won on my page. I was so happy!


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    dotsVendettadots
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    The betrayal is nothing compared to the torture of my soul,
    with toothless smiles and black bleeding eyes, I want to scream,
    and golden things and diamond rings are going to make you sink.
    walk around with snowy eyes and artic heart, you capture me,
    hypnotize me, then put me in chains,
    with iron bars designed to block the pale, thin fingers of hope I have left,
    floating weightlessly like a branch in a river,
    the currents are so strong, Iím breaking upon the jagged rocks below.
    Naked flesh burns like an inferno (so tenderly)
    Gray jewels, shining with vengeance,
    I want to run from you,
    drown me, save me, you burn me,
    let me scream, burn with the desire for revenge,
    I got, gotta vendetta against you,
    oh yes, Iím going to make you pay for everything you put me through.
    Itís my heart that hurts as its bleeding,
    and I know its forgiveness youíre seeking.
    The light is bright, shining right,
    wanting to claim me in the dark of night.
    Red eyes cold with mirth,
    suffocate me through this emotional rebirth.
    I bare my teeth.
    I wanna scream,
    gonna want you I continue to sink.
    Please let me have my vengeance ( my vendetta)
    Is it too much to ask for, to want to feel your beating heart in my hands,
    And youíre blood dripping from my fingers?
    Gray jewels, shining with vengeance,
    I want to run from you,
    drown me, save me, you burn me,
    let me scream, burn with the desire for revenge,
    I got, gotta vendetta against you,
    oh yes, Iím going to make you pay for everything you put me through.
    Itís my heart that hurts as its bleeding.




    Submitted on 2006-11-20 16:46:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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