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    dots Submission Name: love yadots
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    Author: supergirl_in_oh
    Elite Ratio:    1.67 - 29/122/52
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 151
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    dotslove yadots
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    And when she looks into you eyes and tells you it's the end, just know it's the biggest scar she'll ever mend. why did you go and lie? whisper your last words, and kiss her goodbye.

    She's in love, but she cant save him. how can se be happy while he's thinking suicide? she doesnt want to believe she may be one of the only good things in his life...

    i havent said it. but i need to. i want it. but im giving it to you. and when i say, listen well, you may not hear it, but it will be told quietly. when i am sure.... and im just waiting untill the right time to utter the three words, and hopefully hear you utter them back... "I love you"




    Submitted on 2006-11-20 18:42:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree. This wasn't something I'd write about...love/suicide poems just aren't my thing, but to each their own, I suppose.
    If you want me to, I'll comb through this and give it a thourough examination as far as grammar goes...it could use it....Always remeber that this isn't a blog site, it's a poetry site, and grammar and language is very important.

    *tox*
    | Posted on 2006-11-21 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      The only criticism I can give is that you need to work on your grammar; mostly capitalization, punctuation, and few spelling errors/typos.
    Overall, I really like this piece and you need to keep up the work.

    The Dead Life,
    -Zach
    | Posted on 2006-11-20 00:00:00 | by Khargath | [ Reply to This ]



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