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    dots Submission Name: If Only God Can Wonderdots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsIf Only God Can Wonderdots
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    If only God can wonder,
    What our lives evolve to
    Then the truth lies in the eyes,
    Of the beholder,
    Making it seem like God's true.

    And if God sat down to wonder,
    Why we cry celestial tears,
    Then maybe the feeling of,
    Being somber,
    Can be an image in the mirror,
    That smeared.

    But who sits and wonders for us,
    When our pain is only from growing up,
    Then and only then in the moment of lust,
    Can my persuasion of blaming God,
    Finally stop.




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