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    dots Submission Name: under the same stardots
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    Author: Doom_Hammer
    ASL Info:    17/m/canada
    Elite Ratio:    1.06 - 36/41/20
    Words: 371
    Class/Type: Misc/
    Total Views: 545
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       well i hope you like it because again its not my goth work this is ment to go to a celtic melody that i already have planded out
    this one will hopefully be recored soon

    -dedicated to Caralee-


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    dotsunder the same stardots
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    when i was a young lad
    my father use to say to me
    our paths are wrighten out for us
    we follow where it may
    separated by rank and class
    forever to remain

    but did not want to beleave
    when she stood infront of me
    that she was ment for greatness
    and i her nobel sheep
    something grue inside of me
    that stragthens me inside


    as i lay here
    i gase into the star lit night
    i pray one day our paths unight
    for they may lead diferent ways
    they are under the same star

    the day i kneeld infront of her
    i could feel my spirit rise
    so sware my strenght and life to her
    seemed more like my prise
    i would sware the same to her
    under my kings eyes

    if i could make her happy
    from my every nobel deed
    and if she would let me
    honnor her with every heart beat
    to stay by her side always standing strong
    to never let her feel the pain
    of the ever changing world

    c)
    as i lay here
    i gase into the star lit night
    i pray one day our paths unight
    for they may lead diferent ways
    they are under the same star

    i lay here now gaseing at the sky
    wondering does she think of me
    as the stars light her eyes
    the only thing im sertan of
    is that to my surprise
    we can gase apon the same stars
    every single night

    i seen her the other day
    elegant in the sun
    she terned to me and smiled so light
    it was magic to my eyes
    she spoke to me so softly
    i could hear an angel sing
    she asked if i would acompany her
    to the ball the nexed evening

    my heart was filled so full of joy
    no words cold explane
    i axeped grasiously
    and my life would never be the same

    here i stand with her again
    only this time by her side
    as we sare into the night
    forever under the same star

    under the same star: kari villa
    :kari villa
    November 21, 2006 12:19




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    ||| Comments |||
      Kari
    NowThis is awesome
    This is your best write Ive read yet
    I can see and feel the improvements in your work perfectly
    You did an excellent job with this
    This is really good and I almost feel like this is an olde folk song
    I loved the way this slowly moved telling a story with every word
    Excellent Job!!!!
    Im proud of you my man
    Keep it Up!!!!!!!!!!!!
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      i dont kno u but i loved it hehe
    amanda
    | Posted on 2006-11-21 00:00:00 | by amandakaye | [ Reply to This ]
      very pretty
    | Posted on 2006-11-21 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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