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    dots Submission Name: To This Mandots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       For this man I speak of.. I long to say so much to talk of so much but I feel as if I am letting go of all I have held onto I feel as if I am allowing my self to get hurt as if i'm asking for such thing. because in the end thats all that happends once you allow someone into your life.


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    dotsTo This Mandots
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    I long to tell this man my life story
    I long to have his hands caress my body
    To heal the several scars I have endured throughout this life I have and am living
    I desire to engage myself into converstation with him, of my life.
    Although my desires are powerfull
    My remorse is inevitable
    For I can not escape these feelings of loss
    I feel as if I have betrayed no one but myself
    When these desires of speaking of my life to this man
    And when I act upon them
    Feelings of defeat overwhel me
    As if I am allowing all I've ever held onto go!
    For I cannot engage in such actions, and if I ever temtped to
    I need to shoot them down
    ... The attempts to speak of my past of my life
    I have an obligation to myself to over throw these efforts of getting close with me.




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      oh i can relate. i just recently had a breakup and i started yelling at myself for letting him get so close to me. i mean i told this kid the world. he knows EVERYTHING about me. thank God we just got back together though, cause i gave my all to him. every bit of my heart, trust, and emotions i poured into this relationship. it's kinda hard not to do that when you love someone so much though. good work.
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2006-11-25 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      I understand about not letting someone in or to close but wanting to at the same time. a persons thoughts are their own. And a past CAN come back to haunt you...This I know.

    Its good
    | Posted on 2006-11-23 00:00:00 | by Desolate_beauty | [ Reply to This ]


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