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    dots Submission Name: The linedots

    Author: freshcookies
    Elite Ratio:    4.15 - 63/77/45
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe linedots

    When does friendship cross into love?
    Somewhere far behind us by now.
    And where is the boundary between love and romance?
    Have we crossed that too? Or not yet?
    Will we ever?
    Maybe Iím standing right on the line.
    I canít see how we fit together.
    I canít see how we fit apart.
    Iíve wondered for a long time.
    Do we cross that line together, or separately?
    And how will we know what to do
    If we both end up on the other side?

    Submitted on 2006-11-21 00:27:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      defintely an issue i think we all have dealt with, so this piece has a universal appeal. I like the ideas you push of uncertainty. I would say maybe take these thoughts of "crossing-lines", confusion, and apssion and wrap them up into a more vivid metaphor. Pull out those images that really explicate the confusion and love.

    i really enjoyed this write.

    "And where is the boundary between love and romance?"

    indeed a loaded question

    | Posted on 2006-11-21 00:00:00 | by googie | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh...The 'line'...*sighs*

    That bloody line will be the death of me...I'm glad soemone's written a poem about it (of course i'd have never thought to do so myself lol)

    I like this because of the way you've written it, more a poetic discussion than anything. The multitude of questions only help to communicate the feelings of confusion we feel when unsure about our feelings (especially ones between 'friends')

    Also one more thing (though I'm not sure because it might be how you spell it in America) but seperately is spelt with an E not an A
    | Posted on 2006-11-21 00:00:00 | by Tali | [ Reply to This ]

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