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    dots Submission Name: Priest and the Pagandots
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    Author: Scribner
    Elite Ratio:    2.3 - 131/134/18
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPriest and the Pagandots
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    "You must come out of the darkness
    and reveal yourself to the light."

    "I do not dwell in darkness.
    The problem is with your sight."

    "You must except the Lord, your Savior,
    if you are to reap Heaven's rewards."

    "I enjoy all these treasures now
    and without the subjugation to your Lord."

    "I fear Satan is too strong in you
    and to be saved, the light you must seek."

    "And I fear that your light is as blinding
    as the darkness of which you speak."




    Submitted on 2004-01-29 01:05:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is great. I'm always a sucker for rhyming dialogue.
    | Posted on 2004-01-29 00:00:00 | by DevilDinosaur | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooers, that's something new . A debate, ne? >.< Interesting! I wish I knew how this turned out. Debates are really interesting...I like how you pointed out the situation from both sides. However, I'd say I'd want to go with the priest.. :) but, I must admit, the Pagan has good points.

    " 'You must except the Lord, your Savior,...' " in this line, you used the wrong form of 'except'.

    Unique . I like x).
    | Posted on 2004-01-29 00:00:00 | by PastelSky | [ Reply to This ]


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