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    dots Submission Name: Gleemdots
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    Author: dontgetemo
    ASL Info:    18/M/OH
    Elite Ratio:    1.76 - 12/17/9
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 450
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 953



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    dotsGleemdots
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    I know that stare
    The one you give to me
    The blank expresion
    Dead confessions
    All things inbetween

    You lie there
    Lifeless and priceless
    Keep you on ice
    No rotting away
    Surly not today
    Negative twenty degrees
    Will keep you near to me


    We dance a dance
    Fingers to toes
    Taped together
    In a moonlight sanata
    You follow me well
    Move for move
    Eye for an eye
    You dont need them anyways

    No coffin too soon
    Because i'll miss you
    And I have much more fun
    Playing around all day
    You make a good puppet
    And an even better muppet
    And you dont complain about anything

    But when the time comes
    To put you back in your box
    Fear not, for I will come back
    I will dust you off
    And we will play
    Once again




    Submitted on 2006-11-21 15:31:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that is so sick!!!!!!! i love it. i love it, love and lust, death and devotion. and a humorus twist on obsession. very creative. i like it
    | Posted on 2006-11-21 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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