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Author: precious_poetry
ASL Info:    19 F TN
Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137 /145 /67
Words: 271
Class/Type: Poetry /Broken
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This isn't all that good. I was very upset when I wrote it and payed no mind to how well it was written. I haven't changed anything yet. But I may rewrite it later, try to make it sound a little better. Open to suggestions, whatever. Enjoy... if you can.


I let you have it,
What was left of my heart.
I trusted you with my love,
And you rip me apart.
My tears couldn't possibly,
Continue to flow,
I've cried so many nights,
And I can't let you go.

My heart tortured,
By the sound of your voice,
My love for you betrayed,
By your one simple choice.
I'm your doll, a toy to you,
And you incite so much pain.
Prying at my soul with your words,
And killing the happiness within.

Without you here beside me,
I feel lost and alone.
Fooled yet again, by man,
All empathy is gone.
You are the noose around my neck,
And the cold blade on my skin.
Threatening me with abandonment,
Killing me with words left unspoken.

Admit to it, if you will,
I mean nothing more to you,
Than a night in the bed,
No words you spoke were true.
You lie to me, to get what you want,
And feel not an ounce of remorse.
Perhaps you'll shed a tear,
When you stumble upon my cold corpse.

I've died inside because of this,
And I can never be revived.
Apathy, your weapon of choice,
I had no chance to survive.
With no reason to go on,
What have I to live for?
Perhaps I have nothing, and...
Habitual breathing is such a bore..

How will you feel then?
To know I am dead,
And you wear the fault,
On top of your head...
Miss me when I'm gone.
Think of me as I rot...
My death, a gift for you,
Your little Forget-Me-Not...

Submitted on 2006-11-21 15:36:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| Posted on 2006-12-09 00:00:00 | by DontLetGo421 | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow. So Raw and so original. I like it very much.
It might sound better if you change rip into ripped. Besides that, everything is great. I feel your emotion. I can relate. Very good write :)


| Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]

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