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    Author: dreamer37517
    ASL Info:    25/F/Bama
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 161/149/49
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Have you ever been in an aimless mess?
    A random spiraling inner-depression?
    You're not sure why you feel this way
    but you know that somethings missin'.

    Your mind is constantly turning.
    You cant grasp your current thought.
    You try to catch the correct answer,
    but realize it cant be caught.

    You try to figure out whats missing.
    You test the hole, and feel the shape.
    You probe and pick, and dig some more,
    All you find is a random ache.

    Have you ever been in this crazy wreck?
    A pointless build-up of confusion.
    Only to finally determine,
    There is no possible solution.




    Submitted on 2006-11-21 17:28:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      only everyday of my entire life!!
    nice work, feels like a spiralling abyss of why's and how's.
    trapped? definately.
    excellent piece, i can feel the frustation of not knowing any of the answers.
    i hope you find them...i'm still looking....
    michelle
    | Posted on 2006-11-21 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      hey yeah... I'm always there. hahaha
    | Posted on 2007-01-02 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i can relate to this a WHOLE lot right now.. i think you capture feelings of depression beautifully.. i've felt like i cant think my thoughts all the way through, i cant get to the end of anything in my head when i'm depressed its just impossible to figure things out.. "can't grasp your current thought" just hits home.
    | Posted on 2006-11-21 00:00:00 | by k. rade | [ Reply to This ]


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