Bravo, very beautifully written. Only one minor thing that I saw wrong:
"A journey lies before you the path between life and dream Between sorrow and happiness lies the darkness in between"
Though your imagery is good, the wording is insuffcient for the flow and meter that you have already established. I would suggest chaning the last word of the last line. Since you already used "between", I would try something like:
"A journey lies before you- the path between life and dream. Through the sorrow and the happiness lies the darkness in between."
Rather than hindering the wonderful rythm you already established, this would aide it. That is simply my opinion. Despite that one little tweak, I would declare this quite a nice piece. Good Luck! ~Clover
Submission Name: Fade, my Memory
