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    dots Submission Name: Thoughtsdots

    Author: Lover girl
    ASL Info:    17, female
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 83/54/24
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 630
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       This was writen a long time ago, the sad thing is that it is still true.

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    Thoughts of you run through my head
    Your image in my eyes
    The words you left me in my heart
    The kiss still on my lips
    As time goes by
    And the world moves round
    Everything seems to slip
    Everything in my life swirls and wirls
    Everything that is
    But one, one simple thing will never change
    My love for you will stay the same
    Thoughts of you run through my head
    Your image
    Your words
    The kiss still on my lips

    Submitted on 2006-11-21 19:12:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really like how this flows! Its really pretty and sweet... Good Work and Keep Writing!
    | Posted on 2006-11-25 00:00:00 | by Chelsea_Is_Neat | [ Reply to This ]
      it's really great. pretty. keep writing

    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by rocker5871 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really lovely. I like it very much. its so pretty. Makes me feel like the girl I am. Thanks! As far as improvement. I think you need to write more poems! this one is lovely!
    | Posted on 2006-11-23 00:00:00 | by Desolate_beauty | [ Reply to This ]
      fine, fine, almost like a lyric...a love song...nicely done...a simple piece of poetry but still quite well done...Bravo!...Michael
    | Posted on 2006-11-22 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]

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