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Thoughts


Author: Lover girl
ASL Info:    17, female
Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 83 /54 /24
Words: 84
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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This was writen a long time ago, the sad thing is that it is still true.


Thoughts



Thoughts of you run through my head
Your image in my eyes
The words you left me in my heart
The kiss still on my lips
As time goes by
And the world moves round
Everything seems to slip
Everything in my life swirls and wirls
Everything that is
But one, one simple thing will never change
My love for you will stay the same
Thoughts of you run through my head
Your image
Your words
The kiss still on my lips




Submitted on 2006-11-21 19:12:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really like how this flows! Its really pretty and sweet... Good Work and Keep Writing!
| Posted on 2006-11-25 00:00:00 | by Chelsea_Is_Neat | [ Reply to This ]
  it's really great. pretty. keep writing

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| Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by rocker5871 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really lovely. I like it very much. its so pretty. Makes me feel like the girl I am. Thanks! As far as improvement. I think you need to write more poems! this one is lovely!
| Posted on 2006-11-23 00:00:00 | by Desolate_beauty | [ Reply to This ]
  fine, fine, almost like a lyric...a love song...nicely done...a simple piece of poetry but still quite well done...Bravo!...Michael
| Posted on 2006-11-22 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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