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    dots Submission Name: I Used To Thinkdots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    When I was smaller,
    I used to think life was fun and games,
    Now that I've grown taller,
    I know for a fact life is not the same.

    I used to worry about homework,
    At the most,
    Now I act like a jerk,
    And my lifestyle is getting worse.

    I grew up from the dirt,
    Learned to breathe in the fumes,
    Now all the stress gets to me and hurts,
    And in my own thoughts I get consumed.

    I used to think,
    That my parents would be around,
    For eternity,
    But now as my tears make my eyes blink,
    I know the cruel reality,
    Of not knowing the certainty.
    ...But I used to think...






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      i really liked this because i too often reminesce of how better things seemed to be when i was younger. just a great, real piece of how the hard reality of life changes our lifestyles and consequently us. i believe that it is ultimately up to us to change our life for the better through our actions. great write, my fav part was the last three lines.
    bkj
    | Posted on 2006-11-21 00:00:00 | by bkj43 | [ Reply to This ]


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