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    dots Submission Name: Juliandots
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    Author: Von Django
    ASL Info:    32/M/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 119/148/32
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 100
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    Bytes: 644



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    dotsJuliandots
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    Is your bloated body washed away
    To blinding clinics stripped clean
    Back to bare boned essentials
    Beady eye ravens observe
    Red rimmed and glinting
    The survival instinct that comes and goes
    Like carnivals whirling on dervish day
    The storm always on the horizon
    Howling through whats left behind
    Held in check by smokescreen barbed tongues
    Like yours and mine
    Incestuously entwined
    I pull that
    Ripcord to sever
    Memories that were tender tethered
    Where do we drift now

    Sweet dead uncle
    Crafty old bastard




    Submitted on 2006-11-22 11:48:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I don't think I've read something like this before. Not only was it very well written, but it confused me a bit, which is a good thing, even though I don't like being confused. :).
    I do think of the beggining part to be about a dead pregnant girl who died in the hospital clinic trying to give birth.
    Plus, I was amused and the part when you said "like yours and mine, incestuously intwined"....I've no idea, but I really liked that part, probably because it would be very disturbiong to other people that I know. *shrugs* oh well.


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    | Posted on 2006-11-22 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]



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