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Author: darkwiccan14
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BORED! lol and feeling a little lonely! LOL!!!


Hidding from the mist,
seizing the day,
listening to the rain that sounds crisp,
with some hope that it'll be May.

Hidding from the dark,
which is the reason,
i am falling apart,
waiting for the end of this

Hidding from everything,
i've ever knew,
the rain starting to soud like loud bangs,
and then out of the blue,
came you.

comming out of hidding,
still deciding,
whether or not to trust,

you are the one,
who knew,
just how to help me,
and protect me,
from this terrifying
world wide zoo.

Letting you take me,
away from this place,
is the only fee,
i can pay.

So I give you this thanks,
for saving me,
from this darkness,
and the shores of these banks....

Submitted on 2006-11-22 12:33:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  aww i wish i had some one who would save me from MY darkness. this write was good, but there wasn't much emotion in it. keep it up...
</3 lisa
| Posted on 2006-11-22 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]

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