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    dots Submission Name: Lost in Lovedots
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    Author: Shadowmeld
    ASL Info:    25/M/ u dont need to know
    Elite Ratio:    5.27 - 14/10/3
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsLost in Lovedots
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    [Verse 1]
    You feel so close, how could you be gone, my dream is right, reality is wrong, we're still together where my hearts concerned, for where we are there is no return

    [Chorus]
    "cause I never got back from loving you, I'm still out there in that world you took me too, I just got lost when you found someone new, and i never got back from loving you

    [Verse 2]
    A year of nights have not changed that much, the love we had time can never touch,
    when i close my eyes you're never out of sight
    I am in this house but I'm not home tonight

    [Repeat Chorus]

    [verse 3]

    I remember the night that we met,
    things like that I will never forget,
    even after you said your final goodbyes
    deep in my heart our love never dies

    [Repeat Chorus]




    Submitted on 2006-11-22 13:25:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW... this really got to me, the rhythm flows so easily, and each word or phrase just shows so much emotion, i like this so much, just reading it makes me want to hear it also...

    great job!

    I FEEL IT SHOULD BE ADDED TO MY FAV'S

    ~hannah~
    | Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by seriouscutter19 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, i really like this. such a great song and expressing so much how I am feeling right now. Really good!

    -angel-
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by just an angel | [ Reply to This ]
      
    | Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by Shadowmeld | [ Reply to This ]
      feelings like you are expressing in this write is why i am afraid to fall in love. I've been hurt by so many men, and i love them all, but sometimes I feel that I have to let one go to make room for another. But I don't want to have to let them go, but I don't want to have to hold on to them either. But thats a female for you, never knowing what the hell she wants and never being able to make up her mind. [censored] it, [censored] love...It's just a bunch of bull[censored]...Good Luck with your problems though, and great write...kisses~Ashley~
    | Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by redeemer | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm... i'd like to hear this as a song with music to it... it's very heartfelt and it touches my heart very much...
    Katana
    | Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]
      this is like a knife. is it really like that, someone breaking your heart? how do you make it right, after breaking their heart? you dont want to go back, but...you dont want them to hurt either. you just kinda want them to be happy, but you dont want them to see you. you dont want to have to see them. or maybe thats just me. i dunno, im not making any sense. well, you asked for thoughts, and i guess you got them.

    i tip my hat and bid thee farewell.
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]


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