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    dots Submission Name: Pathetiquedots

    Author: Non-Sens-Uality
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 67/80/53
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    Details - detachment; dawn of sorrow
    Today I cry
    And die tomorrow.

    Eternity - I seek in blue -
    And all I find
    Behind - is you.

    For my senses - so sublime...
    I challenge space
    I race with time.

    But neither time nor space could tell
    That heavens games
    Are flames of hell.

    That angel eyes could lie so sweet...
    That I'm unreal
    Untill we meet.

    An essence, abstract, bare illusion.
    Sad little line -
    But divine fusion.

    What, friends, is poison
    If not love?
    Beneath your soul...
    Beyond, above...

    Still complex tears -
    Redeemers choice,
    That had as muse
    The devils voice.

    Submitted on 2006-11-22 14:18:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Psychodelic, surreal, elemental darkness that suits you like horns to a tainted angel. A long time to wait but it was worth a while. What do I tell you? In this schizo community of poets schizo poems are more then welcome, especially when written THIS good. Excellent rhyme my favourite illusionist.
    | Posted on 2006-11-23 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed reading this. The style kept me engaged seeing as i normally get distracted while i read xD. I enjoyed the wording and just the over all poem itself.
    my favorite part is the third stanza I just like how it sounds.
    good job.
    | Posted on 2006-11-22 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]

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