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    dots Submission Name: buring flowerdots
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    Author: dark figure
    ASL Info:    17/m/uk
    Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 66/74/29
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 924
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    Bytes: 582



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       put this god dam fire out lol


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    dotsburing flowerdots
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    burning petals
    flames so bold and bright
    for ever condemmed
    as its flames bring life to this night

    buring flower of of my heart
    accompanied by the piano of the the deceaced
    this light in the dark
    being consumed by an evil beast

    for ever alight
    bringing warth to others
    draing me of life
    as this fire that could never be smothed

    buring flower of my heart
    finaly running short
    burning flower of this fading life
    that aquired every thing that it saught...




    Submitted on 2006-11-22 16:03:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      why would one burn such flowers?
    just kidding.
    try and deal with this evil by talking to that guy in the holy bible...
    | Posted on 2006-11-22 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]


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