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    dots Submission Name: In Case I Diedots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsIn Case I Diedots
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    In the event of my death,
    Nothing I did was ever positive,
    I took care of crying the tears,
    My father never shed,
    And the feeling was always massive;
    So kill me while I'm dreaming,
    Or just put my misery at ease,
    How ironic that I'm screaming,
    Yet the weight of the world in my shoulders,
    Always seems to increase.

    In case I die,
    I only got a couple of close friends,
    That will keep me in their memory,
    Well...
    Just hold on to those memories strong,
    So you could always,
    Remember me.




    Submitted on 2006-11-22 19:37:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a nice, moving poem. Sad, but nice. It makes me feel proud for all that I've done, and to me that's what the message of the poem is. Am I close? I think the poem is great the way it is, though my only gripe is that it doesn't feel entirely original. It seems very emo, but at the same time not too emo? Just the right emo. =]

    Overall: Great poem, share it with your friends.
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by GetFighted | [ Reply to This ]


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