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    dots Submission Name: Beauty In Her Eyesdots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 611
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 677



    Description:
       To someone very special you know who you are. Don't even ask!!!


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    dotsBeauty In Her Eyesdots
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    I saw beauty,
    At the best of my ability,
    It took me by surprise,
    But her eyes were her best artilary;
    When everyone else wore a disguise.

    Her eyes were like a million glowing stars,
    They put an end to the suffering I carried inside,
    Though happiness always travels so far,
    I thought her glow was magnificent,
    Though it signified pride;
    And I wondered if her tenderness,
    Was ever damaged,
    And if she ever felt,
    Like life was just too much,
    Though I admire her regardless,
    I would let my eyes cry,
    Just so hers,
    Would never be touched.





    Submitted on 2006-11-22 19:47:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was really good. the only i don't get is the last 3 line other than this was perfect, i my mind. well keep this [censored] up, u got potitail ( [censored] still can't spell) well hit me up.


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    | Posted on 2007-01-03 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
      i love this! im not sure who its for but im guessing its me? lol boootiful mwahhzz! ))))
    | Posted on 2006-11-22 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]


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