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    dots Submission Name: pleasuring naturedots
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    Author: chilz
    ASL Info:    20/F/WA
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 137/147/84
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotspleasuring naturedots
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    Laying nude in an endless silk sea
    Letting each wave wash over me

    Putting all the stars in my hair
    Nature caressing me with care

    Warm sensations' rhytmic tunes
    Power by the ever glowing moon

    Orange leaves fall onto my breast
    Flower go for their final rest

    Sun rays lick and kiss my skin
    Fire burns bright from within

    Heart beats go so fast
    A feeling we want to last

    Laying in a blanket of snow
    The pleasuring nature letting go




    Submitted on 2006-11-22 20:10:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      loved this! my only critique is i wish there was more of it.

    one suggestion...change "laying" to "lying"
    | Posted on 2006-12-16 00:00:00 | by aliciaflower04 | [ Reply to This ]
      i love this! im definitely adding it to one of my favs. i love the rhyming and i agree with Ramneet about describing the beauty of nature, but I LOVE how you put it together with the beauty of the naked body, which is and will always remain the true beauty, to me anyway, not trying to sound weird. very nice!

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    | Posted on 2006-12-09 00:00:00 | by just an angel | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful poem describing the beauty of nature and the pleasures it can bring to our life.
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]


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