[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: pleasuring naturedots

    Author: chilz
    ASL Info:    20/F/WA
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 137/147/84
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1109
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 570


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotspleasuring naturedots

    Laying nude in an endless silk sea
    Letting each wave wash over me

    Putting all the stars in my hair
    Nature caressing me with care

    Warm sensations' rhytmic tunes
    Power by the ever glowing moon

    Orange leaves fall onto my breast
    Flower go for their final rest

    Sun rays lick and kiss my skin
    Fire burns bright from within

    Heart beats go so fast
    A feeling we want to last

    Laying in a blanket of snow
    The pleasuring nature letting go

    Submitted on 2006-11-22 20:10:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      loved this! my only critique is i wish there was more of it.

    one suggestion...change "laying" to "lying"
    | Posted on 2006-12-16 00:00:00 | by aliciaflower04 | [ Reply to This ]
      i love this! im definitely adding it to one of my favs. i love the rhyming and i agree with Ramneet about describing the beauty of nature, but I LOVE how you put it together with the beauty of the naked body, which is and will always remain the true beauty, to me anyway, not trying to sound weird. very nice!

    | Posted on 2006-12-09 00:00:00 | by just an angel | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful poem describing the beauty of nature and the pleasures it can bring to our life.
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    Bond written by saartha
    Fasade written by jackz
    Dashboard Light written by layDsayD
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    Push written by JanePlane
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    AI written by poetotoe
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    Every..... written by jackz
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (6) written by endlessgame23
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    Before, Now, & After written by SincerWritinAsh
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    Still Fighting See? written by ForgottenGraves
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    Your Lover written by Cordell
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    Summer written by layDsayD




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]