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    dots Submission Name: Here I am...dots

    Author: psyko
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 376/168/66
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       Another one I wrote a while back... near thanksgiving of 2004.

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    dotsHere I am...dots

    I am a creation within your mind.
    I am the words that make you walk the line.
    I am the feeling, the pain you love to feel.
    I am the words that confuse, but I'm still real.

    I am the nonsense, that makes sense to only you.
    I am the puzzle you must see, in order to start anew.
    I am the being inside, that controls when you abort.
    I am the puzzle you hate, but you know that you must sort.

    Do you believe in life, and love for all your kind?
    Do you believe they're true, the words inside your mind?
    Can I make life worth living, and make you wish for death?
    Can you believe my words? That "I'll be there at your last breath."

    I am the voice you here, that makes you pass the test.
    I am the one you hide, when you're behind the desk.
    I am the voice you know, but you're too afraid to tell.
    I am the one you try to fool, but I know you so well.

    Submitted on 2006-11-22 22:31:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      O' wow this poem is so awesome. It flowed as a rappers song (good thing) there were not points where I had to stop and reread what you wrote because it all made perfect sense to me the first time around. It was an amazing poem, there were a lot of almost camoflauged emotions. Gorgeous piece........

    | Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by aNNmARIE | [ Reply to This ]
      oh, dear one. this is wonderful. i love the whole "i am your paradox" idea.

    | Posted on 2006-11-28 00:00:00 | by rocker5871 | [ Reply to This ]
      A favourite, that's what this one is.
    | Posted on 2006-11-23 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, this is a good one. I like it all.
    Alot of good word choices and word puns.
    I like all the first lines of each stanza. They're all so deep and interesting. I love this line:
    "I am the nonsense, that makes sense to only you"
    It makes so much sense. :)

    I really like this one.
    It makes you think. About alot of different things.
    | Posted on 2006-11-23 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]
      For some reason I get the idea of metallica with sad but true. Don't ask me why I guess its the "I am the.." statements but ITs really good then really all your sh*t is good!
    | Posted on 2006-11-23 00:00:00 | by Desolate_beauty | [ Reply to This ]

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