It's not my scene

Author: MysterydarkPoet ASL Info:    20/f/Aust Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173 Words: 64

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It's not my scene

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Dearest of the darkest symphony I feel more than sympathy It takes more than a strategy For me to understand your tragedy It's a power within my heart I know, I felt it from the start I've seen you in your misery Fooled by others trickery & They wear it like a badge of honour While you lay in squaller

Submitted on 2006-11-22 22:50:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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There is some kind of pattern, which is different, refreshing, but ... considering there is only four lines, and the words you use are very general, it takes away from the poem itself, I'm not sure. I really like the first line, and I think that would be a great start to another poem. Maybe add to this? <3 Stephy

| Posted on 2006-11-22 00:00:00 | by burningover_out | [ Reply to This ]

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