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It's not my scene


Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 64
Class/Type: Poetry /Sorry
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It's not my scene



Dearest of the darkest symphony
I feel more than sympathy

It takes more than a strategy
For me to understand your tragedy

It's a power within my heart
I know, I felt it from the start

I've seen you in your misery
Fooled by others trickery

& They wear it like a badge of honour
While you lay in squaller




Submitted on 2006-11-22 22:50:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  There is some kind of pattern, which is different, refreshing, but ... considering there is only four lines, and the words you use are very general, it takes away from the poem itself, I'm not sure. I really like the first line, and I think that would be a great start to another poem. Maybe add to this?

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Stephy
| Posted on 2006-11-22 00:00:00 | by burningover_out | [ Reply to This ]


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