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    dots Submission Name: 15dots

    Author: Desolate_beauty
    ASL Info:    26 female
    Elite Ratio:    1.43 - 118/61/22
    Words: 282
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
    Total Views: 861
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    Bytes: 1955

       Dedicated to my friends in Denver. I will always miss you and you will be remembered...long live Blue and Silver!!!

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    7 miles away,
    Sitting the the library.
    This was my sanctuary.

    11 am, starting at the clock
    watching the second hand tick.
    "Come on 8 minutes!" I would say.
    I didn't know.
    They didn't tell us.

    8 minutes passes by and time for lunch.
    April 20, '99 and 15 dead.

    7 miles away,
    walking around the school
    looking for something to eat.

    12 Noon, looking at the clock,
    My friend's phone rings.
    "No, I'm in class. I'm not watching news,"
    she said.
    I didn't know.
    They didn't tell us.

    math class passes by and time for Government.
    April 20, '99 and 15 dead.

    1pm, looking at the TV,
    my friend looking on.
    "what's going on?" I asked
    eating my sandwich.
    I know now.
    But they didn't tell us.

    I watched them all, running out of the school.
    I saw him. I saw him fall.
    The teacher so scared.
    Police didn't help him at all.

    I heard the news later that day...
    It was so hard to believe,
    Silver and Blue ribbons line the way.
    "I can't believe it happened," I would say.
    I knew, but
    They didn't tell us at all.

    I didn't want to believe,
    to go home from that place wet.
    Soaked with tears of my friends.
    Watching others leave
    because of what they would wear
    It's a nightmare here.

    They didn't want to listen when we warned them.
    They didn't want to listen and we told them.
    So it happened anyway on that day.
    To hard to think of. I don't want to speak of
    April 20, '99 and 15 dead
    ...in Columbine

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      Awsome write! I absoluty love it. Deep feeling. Very tragic though.
    Keep up the great work hun,
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by Darklonelygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      damn that's tragic..I am definitely feeling it from your writing..I am so sorry..
    | Posted on 2006-11-26 00:00:00 | by POETIC-PRINCESS | [ Reply to This ]
      says a lot and although i can not relate I will do my best to put myself their shoes, and in your's. All we can really do, which is not much I must add is tell ourselves, that things happen for a reason and although what happend was/is teirrible and although 15 students/teachers died that evening it could have been much much worse. I'm not trying to make it all come out like oh its not a big deal but I feel rather than be .... mmm *searching for the word* upset,hurt,mad... be thankfull! that it ended with 15 whom past away. the massure could have been such a worse turn out. Nevertheless this peice you have posted is full of emotion we all should be able to realize this. And how you have wrote it, is without a doubt a peice of art within its self.

    | Posted on 2006-11-25 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this. what a horrible tragedy...actually, i'm living in denver right now--and something similar happened again a month or two ago about 45 minutes away. very sad. i think you capture what it must have been like to be a student then, at that time. i like how it changes from "they didn't tell us at all" to the "we told them" bit. good!
    | Posted on 2006-11-23 00:00:00 | by lauren hamill | [ Reply to This ]
      wish you were in that school this world would be a better place with out you in it
    | Posted on 2006-11-23 00:00:00 | by urbanguttah | [ Reply to This ]
      being from the uk, i don't know much, if anything, about the situation you're talking about. but i certainly understand the feeling and emotion written here.
    this is a very sad piece, heartbreaking.
    | Posted on 2006-11-23 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      this is good. i know about the situation. some kids at my school were planning a columbine-like attack on our school last year you probably heard about riverton kansas on CNN. coy new lives right behind me. anyways. it was a tragedy, columbine i mean, that no one will forget and you would think that people would have enough compassion to quit doing these things. your piece really emphasises the tradgedy. good job. keep it up.

    | Posted on 2006-11-23 00:00:00 | by rocker5871 | [ Reply to This ]
      You M O T H E R F U C K E R!!!!

    THIS IS F U C K I N G good as hell!
    | Posted on 2006-11-22 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]

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