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    dots Submission Name: Like mike...dots
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    Author: psyko
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 376/168/66
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Rant/Misc
    Total Views: 660
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 683



    Description:
       A rant about how the laws are really made for sick mother fucking asshole peice of shit bastard sons of bitches fucking criminals...

    I HATE them.


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    dotsLike mike...dots
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    I wanna be like mike,
    I want to kill,
    I want to rape,
    As Ted Bundy,
    I want to murder.

    I want to be like mike,
    The law rides his cock.
    The lines of shit he feeds,
    To those who trust him,
    They circle the block.

    I wanna trick a woman,
    Into loving me.
    I wanna fuck her,
    And then fuck her up.
    I wanna kill legally,
    I want the righteous,
    To suck my cock.

    I wanna be like mike.

    I wanna be,
    A shitty,
    Piece,
    Of fucking,
    Chicken shit,
    Mother Fucking
    Rat!

    How do you like that?




    Submitted on 2006-11-22 23:51:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. Thats an intense piece.
    | Posted on 2007-05-13 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]
      I hate them too
    this is really simple kinda dark
    and actually really sad how twisted so many people are.......nice [censored] job

    oh yah don't worry about being to harsh on my writing I'm worse on myself then most people could ever be.......constructive critisism is always good.......I can tell you right now I'm too lazy to spell words correctly

    Who gives a fuck you can read it right?
    Well I'm more angry at my mom she's put me through more crap then anyone can imagine she had 4 kids and never married 2 are my half sisters....but my mom is also kind of my best friend she just has a disease......she was only 18 when she had me....I'm kinda the mother figure
    | Posted on 2006-11-23 00:00:00 | by lah | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes, you're asking me to comment and you don't have anything that looks the least like poetry to me.

    It's just anger so we'll call it even and no you don't owe me a read. Hope things get better for you, but the main idea of art is to let this stuff out so as not to hurt anyone.

    There are lots of rants going on at elite, I like them but they have to have style and intelligence. And in a way of course I agree with you, but no one wants the negatvity you're putting out. It's ugly and serves no purpose.
    | Posted on 2006-11-23 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      MAN you are so full of pain its not funny...this actually concerns me...though I know what you mean!
    | Posted on 2006-11-22 00:00:00 | by Desolate_beauty | [ Reply to This ]


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