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    dots Submission Name: The Cost of a Mandots
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    Author: SinCeer05
    ASL Info:    21mVA
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 243/279/168
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 253
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1109



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    dotsThe Cost of a Mandots
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    The Cost Of A Mans Son, Who’s Left Lost An Abandoned
    The Orphan To His Fortune Is Crossed To Demand One..
    Reppin A Hanes Polo, In The Winter He Sports In Shorts For The Game Solo
    Flame Wit No Glow, He Yells At The Clouds In Vain Not Knowing Who To Blame But His Ego
    Damaged Like Goods, He Was Fragile Coming Into This Earth
    His Innocence Was Agile But He Was Unbalanced Since Birth
    Not Knowing His Worth, He Lived To Die Thinking He Was Robbed Of Success In Test
    Alone On A Perch Going To Church, To Think He Was Never Touched By God Or Blessed In Flesh
    Logged In Repressed Stress, Mounting Like A Volcano To Erupt
    As He Aged An Grew Older, He Solved To Blame To Know The Disrupt
    He Was Held Back Involved With Chains In A Soul Without Luck
    A Mans Fate Is Neither Random Or Planned
    Muzzled Lies, Puzzled Lives Fathom A Man
    Tandem Demands, Test To Scrape Dignity Against Morals
    You Live Once But The Sum Reaches Infinity, Hence Quarrels…





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