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    dots Submission Name: Papa!dots
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    Author: Cannablisjunkie
    ASL Info:    22/Male/Indianapolis, IN
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 77/147/87
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       One for my pops.


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    dotsPapa!dots
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    In honor of you
    remembering the words you've used
    Especially the ones musing my evolution
    to mature into one new.

    Son of a great man,
    heard you learned a great deal with your hands?
    'Everything my father can, I know now as good as him.'

    "That's-a-boy, carrying on his strong spirit.
    Good luck-to-ya, and again..I'm glad to hear it."

    'When I'm gone son, cry not; (For me.)
    "No sir, not I."
    Need not any sympathy were i'm going.
    Hold onto dry cheeks respecting me in silence.'

    "I won't ever papa,
    i'll always have a happiness
    you gave me that could never rinse
    or be missed acording to negligence.

    Constructed of emotions from where he began
    exceeding awhile differing long lasting homes into the end.




    Submitted on 2006-11-23 14:32:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nitpick*

    this was very touching. i loved it. i'm sorry if this is for your own father and of his death, yet very happy for you that you had such a great man in your life! (if this is autobiographical) your words flowed together beautifully.

    * it should be 'where' not 'were' in the 3rd line, 4th stanza.

    lauren.
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by lauren hamill | [ Reply to This ]


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