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Drowning


Author: Kasper187
ASL Info:    24 m Texas
Elite Ratio:    2.03 - 71 /64 /43
Words: 160
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Drowning



Live with the pain
Like speaking with sadness
Slipping in the rain
Drowning deep in the madness

Shadows of a doubtful heart
Living for the day the sadness goes away
Wishing she was in my arms and near my heart
Drowning in my fears I kneel and pray...

..oh lord take this dark pain away
Give me faith to find a brighter day
Oh lord guide my heart unto happiness
Because I can't go on living like this

Walk along with a heavy heart
Letting the sadness of life bring me down
Drowning under the pain of us being apart
Blinded by the sadness showing me around

Looking up I can't see the sky
Searching for the only way home
Seems I live not understanding why
I choose to walk alone...

© ©2006 Anthony Paul Garcia/
-SorrowsNomdeplume




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  I really like your style too. You have a great way of capturing the pain in words. Keep writing and I will read. This poem was very well done.
| Posted on 2006-12-09 00:00:00 | by Tidal33 | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem is just...wow. The depth of your words.. they almost made me cry..I know what its like to lose someone you love, praying to feel anything other then the pain and the loss....
| Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by EmpressRose | [ Reply to This ]
  this is great..I can relate
| Posted on 2006-11-26 00:00:00 | by POETIC-PRINCESS | [ Reply to This ]
  this is sad :(. Sometimes u have to walk alone so u can appreciate what u have, had or mourn what u have lost.
| Posted on 2006-11-23 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]


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