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    dots Submission Name: Drowningdots

    Author: Kasper187
    ASL Info:    24 m Texas
    Elite Ratio:    2.03 - 71/64/43
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 926
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    Live with the pain
    Like speaking with sadness
    Slipping in the rain
    Drowning deep in the madness

    Shadows of a doubtful heart
    Living for the day the sadness goes away
    Wishing she was in my arms and near my heart
    Drowning in my fears I kneel and pray...

    ..oh lord take this dark pain away
    Give me faith to find a brighter day
    Oh lord guide my heart unto happiness
    Because I can't go on living like this

    Walk along with a heavy heart
    Letting the sadness of life bring me down
    Drowning under the pain of us being apart
    Blinded by the sadness showing me around

    Looking up I can't see the sky
    Searching for the only way home
    Seems I live not understanding why
    I choose to walk alone...

    2006 Anthony Paul Garcia/

    Submitted on 2006-11-23 19:09:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really like your style too. You have a great way of capturing the pain in words. Keep writing and I will read. This poem was very well done.
    | Posted on 2006-12-09 00:00:00 | by Tidal33 | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is just...wow. The depth of your words.. they almost made me cry..I know what its like to lose someone you love, praying to feel anything other then the pain and the loss....
    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by EmpressRose | [ Reply to This ]
      this is great..I can relate
    | Posted on 2006-11-26 00:00:00 | by POETIC-PRINCESS | [ Reply to This ]
      this is sad :(. Sometimes u have to walk alone so u can appreciate what u have, had or mourn what u have lost.
    | Posted on 2006-11-23 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]

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