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    dots Submission Name: I Dream a Dreamdots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1393
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       This is like two poems. I was told be someone that my first dream was to 'good girl' image, which they thought I was trying to convey, when really, it wasn't, for that is actually one of my dreams. Your probably all rolling your eyes, but it is. Othr one I just wrote because it is a smaller goal of mine, and less imprtant. Thanks.


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    dotsI Dream a Dreamdots
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    I dream a dream
    Of a thousand worlds
    Clashing into one
    Within one place
    Within one time
    Before my own two eyes
    The people talk
    Unafraid of any
    Judgemental thoughts
    Not entering the minds
    For peace and calm
    Surround us
    This is my dream
    And to it I seek
    An answer for
    All problems
    Which take up the time
    Of life itself
    Which should only be enjoyed.

    I dream a dream
    Of a thousand lights
    Flashing at once
    Within one moment
    To be gone in the next
    Before my own eyes
    The people talk
    Unafraid of any
    Harsh comments about me
    Not entering the minds
    That tabloids lies
    Surrounding me
    With endless questions
    That I answer truthfully
    Only to be shot down
    Because my answers aren't
    Extreme
    This is my dream
    And to it I seek
    Endless fame
    And appraisal to fans
    Who take the time
    To see my next movie
    And loyally follow my progress.




    Submitted on 2006-11-23 19:11:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this a lot,I thought that the way in which certain lines were repeated was lovely. Well done.x
    | Posted on 2007-02-22 00:00:00 | by wilted_flower | [ Reply to This ]
      nice poem
    | Posted on 2006-11-23 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]


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