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    dots Submission Name: Death of a Momentdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDeath of a Momentdots
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    How suddenly a moment dies.
    How final--
    like a stillbirth--
    so rarely mourned,
    so rarely treasured.
    Infinity makes a moment seem
    as insignificant as I feel
    amongst the billions on this earth.
    Like a trembling bird a moment dies.
    One jerk of a hand
    sweeps each moment away
    Like a blackboard--
    Forever erased.





    Submitted on 2004-01-29 01:19:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a wonderful read. I love how you kept it so succinct. I once wrote a peace that was similar and it was probably 3 times as long.
    This is one of those poems that I wish I could get the world to read. All to often we as a society rush through life and we never stop and look around. Thanks for sharing this!
    | Posted on 2011-12-05 00:00:00 | by Mithrandir | [ Reply to This ]
      Amazing. . . so what happened with all of these other comments? I thought it was better than just the few words written here. . . you've really captured something hauntingly beautiful here. The only thing I would change would be to put a comma between "trembling bird" and "the moment", just so that it will be grammatical. Good write!
    -Secret
    | Posted on 2004-09-29 00:00:00 | by secret moon | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow... reminds me of that Steven King movie... The Langoliers... Today dies when it becomes yesterday, and the Langoliers follow behind, consuming all the discarded yesterdays. "like a blackboard, forever erased" very powerful image, hun. Btw.... dumplin, pumpkin, punkin.... WHICH IS IT ALREADY!?!?!?!??! Lol... just kidding! Great write. 5 & faves list for sure. <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-21 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      This is wonderful. And I love your last line. Love how you touch upon those things of beauty that most people never stop to think about, let alone appreciate.
    | Posted on 2004-01-29 00:00:00 | by kblyric | [ Reply to This ]
      Actually my brother calls me punkin, so they're both right.
    | Posted on 2004-01-29 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      Right, right, sorry. Great piece dumplin.
    | Posted on 2004-01-29 00:00:00 | by DevilDinosaur | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful. The few moments that it took to read this were really "treasured"
    | Posted on 2004-01-29 00:00:00 | by Scribner | [ Reply to This ]


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